In this week’s cut up practice, I made a poem ( or composition) out of the story of Eden’s Garden form the Bible.
One of my experiments was to remove God from this story. I replaced god with the word “someone”, and that changed the whole dynamic and authoritative feel of the story.
I had a lot of fun replacing words. However, to make these texts into poetry structure, I struggled a lot with lists and strings, and the functions that companies these two types of objects. I spent most of the time correcting errors of syntax and navigating my way through Jupyter notebook. (It is when I realize the importance to name variables properly) I am also still trying to figure out the difference between a for loop, and the for loop written in square brackets. So this week, I mostly tried to select words based on their length and played around with the composition of space. In the following weeks, as I am more familiar with Python syntax, I would love to try more variations on this topic.
In this version, two of my favorite lines are “woman deceived God” and “fruit deceived Adam”. Even though the poem is not that smooth in its narrative right now, I find it interesting that the juxtaposition of the characters provide a context strong enough already for readers to fill the story, or even to create another version of the original story.
i woman
coverings, crush garments
has heard
thistles, taken
deceived Adam
and birth
desirable, sewed garments God
of naked
pleasing, woman
commanded
you sword
commanded, which desirable
his fruit
commanded, woman deceived God
of until
cherubim, fruit garments
the woman
deceived, fruit deceived Adam
be touch
certainly, woman themselves God
you guard
thistles, forth childbearing Adam